Wednesday, June 27, 2012

Below, find another entry for Trifecta.  This is for the third prompt this week:

"Write a 33-333 word response to the song featured below. There are no other requirements for this prompt. Just use the song to inspire a creative response."




“Randy, have you cleaned your room?”
“I’m getting to it mom!” Randy rolled his eyes at his little brother as they sorted baseball cards.
“You promised me yesterday you would have it cleaned by supper today!” Randy’s mother appeared in the doorway, dishcloth thrown stereotypically over her shoulder.
“I know mom, but I had that report on A Separate Peace  due today, and tomorrow I have to stay after school for Mr. Gordon’s extra credit fiber optics project for science class.”  Randy met his mother’s eyes with what he hoped was his most earnest stare. 
His mother sighed, ”All right, Randy, but by Friday evening, I want this place spotless.”
Randy nodded vigorously, “No problem, mom, Friday, definitely.” 
After his mom disappeared down the hall, Randy turned to his brother, “Want to go ride bikes?”
“How do you always get to do what you want?” his brother asked, admiration written on his smooth, round face.
“Easy, dude.  Just remember: tomorrow’s just an excuse away!”


4 comments:

  1. Heh. I like the way you come back to that line, and how it doesn't sound in this kid's voice at all like it does in Billy Corgin's whine.

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  2. Thank you very much. One of the things I wanted from this piece was for it to have a tone that was kind of the opposite of the song itself. (Though I do like the song.)

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  3. I can absolutely see this happening! Beautifully captured!

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  4. "tomorrow’s just an excuse away!” ... Ha!

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