Trifecta's weekend prompt this week is "... to give us a 33-word opening line to your book. That's it. Make us want to
read the next 333 pages of your work." Below is an opening line I always wanted to use:
The
Universe ended on a Tuesday, which was confusing to Farley Trumatter, for the
latest itinerary in his possession had the “Great Whimper” scheduled for
Friday; obviously, he shouldn’t have missed that meeting.
Love everything about this. Love the name. Love the universe's ending being confusing to Farley. OF course this opens up all kinds of questions - If the universe is over, how come Farley's still here? And I love the Great Whimper meeting - More questions - What the heck is the Great Whimper meeting and why did Farley miss it? A terrific first line.
ReplyDeleteI loved this and want to read more...poor ol Farley - so confusing it must be!
ReplyDeleteThis reminds me of when I was in a college French class and went to the overview session for the final exam only to discover that they rescheduled the exam for that day! Oops! I think Farley has it worse since there are no make up exams after The End. But then again, why would he care? Sorry to write such a long comment, but I've enjoyed speculating as to whether this story will take place before or after The End. Very good hook.
ReplyDeleteI love where this is going. Science fiction and fantasy are a big love of mine. I think the first phrase is a complete attention grabber. Well done. Thanks for linking up. We hope to see you back tomorrow for the new challenge.
ReplyDeleteI can't wait to read more. Poor guy. I have nightmares like this, about missing the most important meeting of my life. They aren't as important as this one, but still. Great opener!
ReplyDeleteFarley Trumatter, The Great Whimper, missing the meeting. I like them all. You have a great hook here.
ReplyDeleteHa! This is fabulous. I want to know who was in that meeting. I'd read more, for sure.
ReplyDeleteThis sounds like the beginning of something fun, but dark. A "Dramady"?
ReplyDeleteGreat stuff. New to Trifecta and just posted my piece.
Will be back, for sure!
Christine
@thatgalkiki
A whole load of questions are aroused by this intriguing opening. A latter-day Hitch-hiker's Galaxy bean-feast?
ReplyDeleteGreat possibilities with this opening. More, please.
ReplyDeleteOf COURSE it ended on a Tuesday!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much, everyone, for reading and commenting. I appreciate the feedback. I've always wanted to begin a story with "The Universe ended on a Tuesday..." and I'll have to see where it goes from there...
ReplyDelete"The Universe ended on a Tuesday, which was confusing..."
ReplyDeleteYou had me hooked within nine words, so well done! This was absolutely brilliant and deliciously intriguing. If only I could read more...
A really well-desevred first-place. Congrats!
You had me hooked in the first six words. Very well written and congrats on the Trifecta mention :)
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